Published November 19, 2006
I must find
some way or time
that will make me see
somthing inside of me
to make me strong
and forever bond
my love and life
so i can see the light
and know what i want
instead of what i might
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
140,910 Literary Works • 673,729 Reviews
Capitalize your "i" 's when referring to yourself. It's spelled "something"
Also, the second to last line doesn't quite flow, it's a little long. Overall, if you revise this poem slightly it would be greatly improved. Sloppy typing isn't a good thing on this site. It's okay if it's sloppy before you post it, just make sure you run it through a spell and grammar check first, and then look for errors the comp. missed.